Sunday, November 15, 2009
Theme week eleven
Waiting in registration line for an hour—sweltering room—monotonous speaker—chairs with bricks for seats—mind numbing topics—sun teasing through the windows—body odors starting to permeate my nostrils—aching back from sitting so long—empty water pitchers, and yes I’m pissed because, “NO I don’t drink coffee!”—freedom in the sun only a door away—lousy food—“Did I really pay $28.00 for this torture?”
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I don't see this as week 11--on the contrary, it strikes me as shoving its meaning right into the reader's face, nothing held back, nothing below the surface.
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I guess I'm confused. I thought the object was for the reader to understand what was being written about by the details without actually saying what it was.
ReplyDeleteI don't think that's quite it. Sometimes writing can convey meaning without being explicit. Think of that stairways piece. You avoid saying explicitly what you're talking about, yes, but there's no meaning beyond the words here: you're really writing about a boring conference/lecture/workshop period.
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